Wow, nice satire. Good representation of the insanity that is apps like TEMU taking over the world through suspiciously priced and quality goods. Social commentary in media is always nice to see! Especially when it’s well written into the story.
I’m intrigued by this world you’ve created. I laughed at the Temu buying the subway idea. Mostly, I would say that you don’t have to explain yourself through your characters. Would Eric call them Air Force Ones? If not, you don’t need the parentheses. Would he call it Rikers Island or Rikers or something else? Your readers will catch up and unexplained slang will give your world a sense of lived-in authenticity.
I would happily read more of this story and this world, so keep it up.
last night I looked at the screen and it said 40 minutes for a 1 train. 40 MINUTES STANLEY. I’m not sure I can take living inside your fiction (but I did love the story)
Laughed out loud when the train was purchased by Temu! Is this your first hand at fiction? Good work man!
Wow, nice satire. Good representation of the insanity that is apps like TEMU taking over the world through suspiciously priced and quality goods. Social commentary in media is always nice to see! Especially when it’s well written into the story.
lululemon sleeping bags!!
I’m intrigued by this world you’ve created. I laughed at the Temu buying the subway idea. Mostly, I would say that you don’t have to explain yourself through your characters. Would Eric call them Air Force Ones? If not, you don’t need the parentheses. Would he call it Rikers Island or Rikers or something else? Your readers will catch up and unexplained slang will give your world a sense of lived-in authenticity.
I would happily read more of this story and this world, so keep it up.
Yikes! A scary future described well. I hope you keep exploring fiction, Stanley.
Being short 1500 “likes” on rent is wild! 🤯🤯🤯
This was a very fun read.
Do it because you’re good at writing fiction!
This was fun, keep it up!
last night I looked at the screen and it said 40 minutes for a 1 train. 40 MINUTES STANLEY. I’m not sure I can take living inside your fiction (but I did love the story)